Revised Paradox Opening Scene – Proposed

Note: As much as I am focused on finishing Lights and Shadows, Paradox is worming its way onto the front of my mind. The more I resist it, the stronger it becomes so here’s something to keep the demon at bay. 😉

His eyes opened into dim light and a pounding headache. The last thing he remembered was a bright flash filling the cockpit and alarm klaxons. He was laying on a cot, the thin mattress barely protecting his back from the metal strips that crisscrossed underneath. He sat up and took stock of the surroundings. No windows in the rounded metal walls and a single heavy door with a slit peephole and a passing slot at the bottom made up the entry and exit points. The room was colder than a metaphor and he resisted touching the nearest wall.

Then he saw her. She was crouched in a far corner, slowly rocking to herself and muttering a string of syllables that he barely heard. Her rumpled yellow jumpsuit was caked with dirt and her long blonde hair hung in equally dirty stringlets that covered her face. When she noticed him, she cringed and shrank farther into the wall.

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4 thoughts on “Revised Paradox Opening Scene – Proposed

    • The opening scene can create a lot of challenges. You want to start from a point of action, but you want to set a good pace for the rest of the story. I always wanted Paradox to start off somewhat mysterious and a little ominous while bringing both the characters and the reader to a simultaneous realization of what’s happening around them. I expect that I’ll experiment with a lot of opening scenes until I find the final one. 🙂

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  1. So sorry it took me so long! I’ve been dying to read this and here I am slacking off!

    This is an engaging opening scene. Like Jacquie said it raises so many questions. Write on, my friend! Or edit on, as the case may be! 😃

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